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 Hi there! I am Gabriella Smith.That picture up there is a picture of me and my dog Max. You will probably hear me talk about him a lot! I absolutely love writing. I think it is fun to do. It keeps your mind going and it expresses who you are. There are many different types of writing. I love jounalism and writing stories. I love to write stories about many things. I also like to have a lot of details in my writing and I always make it neat. I think being descriptive and being able to understand and visualize what you are reading or writing is extremely important. :) I also love the writing camp at CCCS. The first day I got the paper I knew I wanted to join and I am glad I did. I love it! <3 
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__Max The Dog__ (first draft) I got my energetic and adorable German Shepard on a sunny day on a peaceful farm full of life in Lancaster, Pa. On our way home, the car filled with whimpering. My dog Max was in the back with me and he was very squirmish. I couldn't wait for him to see his new home. After two long hours we were home.I picked him up and brought him in our cozy house. I was exhausted and I wanted to get to bed. We let Max roam around for a while and we could see the confusion on his face. I decided to watch T.V downstairs, but I fell asleep. When I woke up Max was gone. I started screaming his name, with a paniced look on my face. I was so scared until I heard a loud noise, that sounded like something had fallen, behind the couch. I looked behind the couch and there was Max. The next morning when Max went outside to do his buisness, my mom discovered he had worms. We took Max to the vet right away. The vet gave him medicine. Luckily, it only took a week for Max to get better. A few days later Max turned one. We gave him nice food and his first toy. I thought it was so much fun, he didn't stop wagging his tail that day. Max was squeaking his toy all night long. When I got up the next morning his toy was torn apart. My mom and I decided to buy Max a leash and take him for a walk. We took him to the park, but somehow he hurt his paw. We took him home right away. I was so shocked, I wanted to know what happened. We waited a night to see if he would get better. He didn't so we had to take him to the vet again. We made an appoitment. Finally, the day came and we took him to the vet. He was ok, he just had a wound on his paw. We waited a few days after the wound healed, to take him to the park. When we could take him to the park again, he was so happy. A year passed and Max turned two. He grew a lot since we had him and he was huge now. We did the same thing for his first birthday, but now he was so big we had to give him a larger amount of food. We taught him a lot of amazing tricks. Of course, the normal sit, stay, and down. We also taught him to play dead, get his leash, give us five, and howel whenever we wanted. I love my dog so much, he is smart, loyal, nice, funny, and everything you can look for in a dog.

__Max The Dog__ (seventh draft)

One bright afternoon, on a hot summer day, I drove with my step-dad and mom to a farm far away. It was as hot as lava erupting from a volcano. I got, Max, my energetic and adorable German Shepard in Lancaster, PA. He was playing, running and tackling, his siblings, when I first saw him. I knew I wanted him. He looked healthy and funny. My mom was stuck between two dogs and she said which ever dog comes to her, is the one were taking. She put her arms out and Max came. I felt so relieved. My mom paid and then I was holding Max. He was fluffy and soft, and all I wanted to do was cuddle but he was too scared. Max must have been missing his family because the car filled with whimpering and he was squirming all over. It was really annoying. The car ride seemed to go on forever. After two hours of watching trees and cars pass by, I was really sleepy. Finally, we were home. We let Max roam around the house and we could see the confusion on his face. I was watching Suite Life on Deck and I fell asleep. I woke up an hour later and I couldn't find Max. I started screaming his name. I was so nervous because all the doors were locked and he just disappeared. I started searching the house. I heard a loud noise behind the couch and I ran. I saw Max and I felt so relieved. It never crossed my mind that he would be behind there because I didn't think he could fit. I picked him up from behind the couch and hugged him and kissed him. I love my dog, Max, so much. He is nice, funny, cute, loyal, and everything you can look for in a dog.